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[Guest jayblue555]

I want to ask for honest opinion. Do U really think my gig offers what it does?
I think i am not able to communicate the revolutionary repercussions of my gig properly.What i offer is lucid “The great intelligence increase and exponential growth of memory and IQ”. It is a revolutionary product and i want to actually give it to everybody so that their quality of life would increase.Yet i feel my lack of communication skills are diminishing my opinion about my gig.
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