Is my Offer for Buyers Request Right?

[zerosixart]

Hi guys, I would like to know what do you think about what I say at Buyers Request.
Is this Right? Does it need modification? Hi @username, I read your Request and I really would love to work with you in this Project.
I am a Professional Digital Artist who mostly draws Realistic Portraits, I will draw your Baby or Babies in Realistic Style for as low as 5$/each baby, in High Quality and Full of Colors and Details, with Unlimited Revisions until your Full-Satisfaction.
You can visit My Website Portofolio to see the Style I use and look on my other Project I had with Babies.
Link: http://06art.weebly.com
For more Information or any Additional Question, Feel Free to Contact me!
Best Regards,
Idrin from ‘zerosixart’