Plz help improving my gig

[mahfuzaff]

Would you plz help me to improve my email copywriting gig: https://www.fiverr.com/share/Ldl894

[imagination7413]

I noticed that you’ve posted multiple threads in ‘Improve My Gig,’ but not gotten any replies yet. So first:

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• English - Native/Bilingual

Switch this to ‘Fluent.’
People might be ignoring you partially because this was obviously false.

gig:

Do you want to expand your business with MONEY-DRENCHING email copy ?

Money-drenching? What?
This line really doesn’t make any sense. Some of the lines are good, but leading with something like that just makes people stop. You’re probably losing people before they get to the better writing.