Hello I would like to show you my makeup and retouching gig, feel free to make any constructive criticism, thanks for your attention.
Well I would rename it to “I will remove makeup from your girlfriend for $50”
…this is good
I think he is applying makeup, not removing it.
Not all buyers who need this service are aware of the terms you’re using in your title and tags. It may be beneficial to create another gig targeting normal users (only if you want to work with them).
If you are open to edit both men and women, better edit the gig description to “every man and woman would like to” instead of just woman.
You introduce yourself as Rafael. So sign off as Rafael too. Or introduce yourself as Rafael Chedd.
Hope it helps.